Week 2 Story: The Monkey Who Gathered Lotuses
There lived a monkey tribe in the Himalayas, and their
leader was Devadetta. His consorts were many, but his sons were few, and cursed.
None lived to the age of adulthood, and he despaired at finding an heir to his
kingdom, a prosperous and wholesome land.
What Devadetta did not know was that among his consorts
there hid a Rakshasi, a wily shape-changing spirit who schemed to take over his
kingdom, seeding her curses through the land and preventing any other heirs
from interfering with her plans.
This Rakshasi waited until she carried the king’s child,
then spirited him away to a far forest. She raised him with falsehoods of the
king’s depravity and awful deeds. The child grew to hate his unmet father.
When the young monkey reached his coming of age, she
rejoiced in his strength and courage.
“See, my son, how valiant and cunning you are,” she told him
as they journeyed back to the kingdom of Devadetta.
“Your evil father cannot stand against you.”
When the young monkey was presented to his father, the old
man rejoiced and held him close. The Rakshasi became too eager watching them,
and forgot herself, losing her shape for an instant.
“What a son I have! Truly there is none so fortunate as I,”
spoke the king, but inwardly he lamented and knew his good fortune could not
hold. He observed how the boy fought his embrace and saw the malice in his son’s
eyes. He had also seen the flaming eyes appear in the face of his old consort, and
knew then what cursed his lands.
“My son, do an old man this small favor: Go to the lake and
find the flowers which grow upon the water. Bring them back to me that we may
adorn you properly for your coronation,” said the king.
The young monkey was confused, having been prepared for a
violent confrontation. But his mother nodded and he left the hall, making his
way down the mountain to the lake.
Passing through the trees, he the voices of all
the other monkeys speaking in awe of him and his father.
“A strong son! Such a wonderful prince!”
“…I heard that the king was crying tears of joy …”
The kingdom astonished him; prosperity was evident. The
inhabitants of the trees were cheerful and kindly. What a contrast to the bleak
and starved nation recounted to him by his mother! Such thoughts he mused on as
he arrived at the shore of the lake.
He gazed over the water, and saw an abundance of lily and
lotus. The scent was divine. Footprints led to the water in many places, but he
saw that none reappeared leading back up the path, and this troubled him. As he
stared, a slight breeze touched him and he looked up to see his mother staring
at him. Her eyes and fur had become red.
“This is a trap, my son. You must not enter the water, else
the ogre dwelling beneath will swallow you up. This is the king’s killing
ground. You are his enemy. Forget the flowers, my son, do not touch them. Kill
the ogre, and prove yourself a warrior to the people of this land. Lure him out
of the water and kill him! Kill him!” Then she was gone.
He examined the branches which hung over the water, and
found a few vines which he knotted together from a sturdy tree limb. He swung
over the water and collected a white lotus flower, then repeated his swing. Bracing
for the next jump, a pair of eyes larger than his head broke the water’s
surface, and a booming voice hailed him.
“That is my garden.
I work very hard on it, and it has the best fertilizer,
monkeys. You knew that, I see, from the footprints along the bank.”
The prince said nothing, tightening his grasp on the flowers.
“Your valor is impressive, and how delightful to see a
monkey flying overhead. I saw the red demon also, and something of her in you.
It has been many years since her curses have befouled my garden, causing my blooms
to wither and rot. Her kind cannot smell the flowers truly, but perceive instead
a rank and vexing odor. I have no love for her kind.”
The prince realized the ogre was speaking of his mother, and
knew then he was raised in deception. He could not speak, and a lily fell from
his hand as he slumped to the ground. The ogre picked up the lily.
“It would seem the flowers do not trouble you. Take heart in
that. You have met the king of this land. Is he not a good and wholesome ruler?
Are you not his son? Such valor, such resource, and what dexterity you have.
Listen well.”
The prince returned with the ogre to the hall, who carried
flowers of every shape and size. As they entered the hall, the Rakshasi glowered
fiery red at her son. The scent of lotus and lily carried throughout the hall.
The Rakshasi flew higher and higher to escape the flowers, but could not. Hitting
the roof of the room, she burst into seven pieces which showered down upon the
king. He felt the curses lifting off his land. His heart filled with joy and he
knew his kingdom was safe in the hands of his son.
Image Information: Monkey Says Hello
Image Source: Wikimedia Commons
Author's Note
The original story was about a young and clever monkey who confronted his father, a despot reigning over a tribe of monkeys who neutered all his sons so he could never be replaced. His mother hid her son and raised him in solitude, only bringing him back for a confrontation after he was strong enough to stand up to the evil king Devadatta. I took some liberties with this, and exchanged villains. The mother is portrayed as a Rakshasi who tries to use her son to take over the kingdom of a peaceful ruler, and the ogre is a gardener who uses monkeys for fertilizer.
Bibliography
"The Monkey Who Gathered Lotuses" from The Jakata, Volume I by Richard Chambers
Hey Laura!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really creative story. I like how you inverted the moneys origin in a way that allowed him to grow as a character and still come to a decent conclusion. Making the prince realize who the King really is and how he is not evil as his mother had told him is a good way to add conflict and I think it resolved nicely.
Laura, I have to say this was written really beautifully. This was truly a joy to read. Just the style with which you wrote was so fitting. I like that you had the ogre point out the rakshasi's evilness. I did wonder, though, why it only took the ogre's words to convince him to betray everything he knew? It would've been very nice to see a bit more internal conflict in the monkey son. The villain/gender swap was clever as well. I notice a common theme in Indian stories (so far) is that these kings' wives are conniving little ladies. Also, was there a significance behind the 7 fragments of the rakshasi? I like that it's specific because it makes the number 7 feel very important, but I'm not sure why. You did a really nice job breaking up the text and dialogue. I wish you'd placed the picture a little higher in the story, though. I was struggling to picture the prince as a monkey until I saw that at the very end. It could really help your readers with the imagery. You did such a great job with this!
ReplyDeleteLaura this is a wonderfully written story. I love the role switch that you made as the rakshasi being the one to harbor her son away to take over the kingdom. I also liked how the son had such a conflicting choice to make. While being raised his entire life, how would he have known who to choose between his mother, whom he's known his whole life, or his father, the king of a beautiful land. One thing I wonder is what internal thoughts went into the son making the decision to embrace the ogre's advice. How much internal conflict was going on in the son? I think something that would add to this story would be a story of the son as he grew up. What if the son was disobedient of his mother ofter, showing the side of his father? Great story, and I look forward to the many other things you'll write this semester!
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